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Modern Monsters **M//CYOA-pos?**(1-?)
« on: February 28, 2020, 06:09:26 AM »
(Sabrina’s a Bengal and Brogan is a Wyrm **also known as a giant noodle dragon** no arms/ or legs— I’m battling wb — I have a vague idea of where I want this to go—- but I’ve noticed my scatterbrain operates better with a task— sooooo if you have an idea of where you want this to go— opinions and suggestions are welcomed and I’ll see if I can work it in— maybe no promises—<3)) T>x<T


Sabrina couldn’t take it any longer. She had to go and she’d waited as long as she could for Brogan to wake up on his own but by his continuous snoring that wasn’t going to be happening without some outside influence. She honestly didn’t want to disturb him from his slumber so she slowly and gently began pushing him off of her.

She’d freed most of her waist from his weight when he snorted at the disturbance. What she’d managed to push off was suddenly right back on her again. The difference now was his thick muscles were tightening around her.
“Brogan, I need to get up,” she said keeping her voice low.
“Brogan,” she said louder when he didn’t release her.

With a grunt and mumble he loosened his hold on her.
Sabrina pushed at the smooth scales, hastening her freedom so she could dash to the bathroom and relieve herself. The cold floor waking her up a bit more along with the increase of blood flow as she hurried.

Her feet padded on the concrete floor as she made her way back to the bedroom. The hallway light spilling in through the cracked door showed her that nearly all of him was coiled around the bed.
“Brogan,” she chided softly as she went back over to him. “The floor is freezing! You shouldn’t be laying on it...”

Brogan lifted his head up to look tiredly at Sabrina. “It’s not like I can fit all of myself on the bed,” he retorted, stretching his body out a bit. His tail slipping through her legs to go down the hallway and he wasn’t even fully uncoiled. Her tail flicked behind her but slowed when she felt his entwining with hers.
He had a point.

She’d felt him slid into bed with her hours ago and had thought nothing of it, but now somewhat awake Sabrina could see the Wyrm’s nostrils were red and looked a bit moist in the light. She was about to shrug his appearance off, her fur could do that to him after awhile, when he gave a small sniffle. The congested breath barely reached her ears but she watched as his mandible stayed slightly open so he could breathe. He hadn’t been with her the entire night. “Are you feeling okay?” She asked. The muscle in her tail twitched but with the appendage was wrapped up with his so it didn’t move much.

Brogan nodded. “Mhmm.”

His nonverbal murmur didn’t instill confidence in her but she didn’t want to argue. Sighing she turned off the hall light and climbed back into bed. Brogan shifted as she settled, placing several massive coils around her. It wasn’t necessarily comfortable as sleeping solely on her bed, but he was warm, so she made the exception and wiggled down in him until she was satisfied enough with the position that she could fall back asleep. She tossed a bit more of the comforter over only a tiny part of him that was off the bed. It was the thought after all.


Hours had to have gone by, but the tickling sensation creeping through his snout had Brogan stirring but tiredness kept him in a haze.
“HiHhH!”

The sudden intake of breath behind her startled Sabrina into some sense of awareness.
“Brogan?“

“Hh-uUh?” Brogan choked out as he tried to keep the need to sneeze back.
“HAE’IIISHHEEIHHUuue!!”
But he couldn’t.

Sabrina’s fur fluffed when Brogan’s release hit her between her shoulder blades.

“Y-YeEhah?” He said shakily afterwards, sniffling as his nose ran.

She turned over, the action slowed by his added weight, to face him.

He blinked the blur from his eyes to see Sabrina’s ears back, flat against her head and a frown shaping her mouth.

“Bless you.”

Brogan’s eyes closed as he smiled and leaned in to bump his snout against Sabrina’s forehead. His eyes widened as he realized he’d just sneezed on her. And that ‘bless you’ was pretty emotionless. He pulled away to beg for forgiveness but a ticklish tug from his nostril stole  his apologetic breath. His crossed eyes barely had time to focus on a strand of his mucus connecting them before sliding shut.
“HA’GURHiieHHHISHHHHHOOO!!”

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« Reply #1 on: February 29, 2020, 05:08:28 PM »
I really like this story so far. It sets up everything while also having a few sneezes toward the end as well to keep attention. Also, nice unique idea with the wyrm thing. Pretty obscure choice, but it works really well. And the story was also written in a way that made me excited for the next installment. All in all, really good job :)
As for suggestions. . . I don't have any mainline narratives, but a scenario that's always a bit of fun is having Brogan get a stuck sneeze,  and having Sabrina having to coax it out a bit with her tail, or a feather or something.


(Also, loved your Jurassic sneeze story you made a while back as well. :) )

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« Reply #2 on: March 02, 2020, 05:54:42 AM »
I really like this story so far. It sets up everything while also having a few sneezes toward the end as well to keep attention. Also, nice unique idea with the wyrm thing. Pretty obscure choice, but it works really well. And the story was also written in a way that made me excited for the next installment. All in all, really good job :)
As for suggestions. . . I don't have any mainline narratives, but a scenario that's always a bit of fun is having Brogan get a stuck sneeze,  and having Sabrina having to coax it out a bit with her tail, or a feather or something.


(Also, loved your Jurassic sneeze story you made a while back as well. :) )

Hey thanks Lurker!!! That really means a lot!! I wanna continue with the Jurassic crew someday!! And thanks for the scenario!! Totally went with your suggested tail coaxing— sorry I’m not sure how to properly tag you—- hope you see this ❤️

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Re: Modern Monsters **M//CYOA-pos?**(1-?)
« Reply #3 on: March 02, 2020, 05:57:34 AM »
pt. 2 Tail Coax thanks to TheLurker — it’s a bit long but i think it’s worth it— T>x<T



Sabrina closed her eyes just in time as Brogan sneezed. She blinked when a blast of air and  fine mist hit her chest as he ducked between them to sneeze. Mumbling under her breath she wiped at the fur on her chest. The spray from his sneeze coming off relatively easily. “Bless you.”

Brogan sniffled keeping his head down between them as the tickle bounced back and forth, unsure if he was going to sneeze again. But when the need didn’t increase he slowly raised his head to look apologetically at Sabrina. “Thanks,” he said with a weak chuckle.

Sabrina’s eyes narrowed at the snout before her, specifically the twitching nostrils. Her tail flicked with her agitation.

Sniffling as his nose threatened to run Brogan slipped his tail over to hers.

“I have to get ready for work,” Sabrina said as she slipped her tail out of his entrapping one. Shucking off his coils as she got out from under him. Throwing back the curtains to let in the growing light.

Brogan frowned slightly as he watched her. “I thought you had today off?” She had told him that just the other day. It’s why he’d come over in fact, because he knew she’d be home and would in hopes care for him.

The street below was relatively bare, which would make getting to work quicker so she could take her time if she chose. Looking over her shoulder to the Wyrm and his glistening nostrils. “Celeste called out and I need the hours,” she said as she left the room and went to start the shower in the hall bathroom. The water took a few extra minutes in the morning to heat up so as she waited she eyed the towels.

He couldn’t argue with that. Brogan sighed lifting his tail to itch his nose with the end of it as best he could. His eyes snapped open and he lowered his tail when the bed dipped as Sabrina climbed back in. He wasn’t ready for the cold cloth she suddenly placed on his snout but after the startled gasp he enjoyed it as she wiped his snout for him. This was the care he was hoping for.

Sabrina wiped Brogan’s snout carefully, feeling the heat coming from him even through the wet end of the towel. Turning the cloth she dried him off with the same dutiful care. She turned her head as Brogan leaned in, kissing her then on the cheek.

“Thank you,” Brogan said with a sniffle, wanting to keep his snout dry for as long as he could. He couldn’t blame Sabrina for turning away from his kiss but it still didn’t feel great.

Getting back up Sabrina tossed the towel into the hamper to wash later. She went to her closet to pick out her outfit but with a huff decided to do it after her shower since she couldn’t lay it out on the occupied bed. She looked back to said occupant unsurprised to see him watching her. Without a word she left the bedroom and went back to the bathroom.

Sighing Brogan settled back down to rest as his girlfriend of many words left the room. Soon enough he heard the water stop and the furdryer begin, the white noise of that soothing him to sleep once again.

As Sabrina padded back into the bedroom her ears twitched at the sound of snoring. She didn’t want to stir him, she was clean and dry now. Easing the door open to see that Brogan had managed to heft the rest of himself up on the bed and shield his eyes with her pillow from the rising sunlight. She was glad she’d left the closet door open and now wouldn’t run the risk of waking him by sliding it open. She quickly pulled out a white camisole and black jeans before dashing into the living room to dress. Grabbing her phone and purse from the counter she saw she had a voicemail from her boss. Rolling her eyes as she figured he was telling her to come in earlier.
Lucky for him she was planning on doing just that.
Snagging her heels by the door she left her apartment, locking the door quietly behind her before slipping on her heels. Pushing the button for the lift the doors opened instantly just as the message started to play.
The raspy tone of her boss informed her that he didn’t need her to come in early, or at all to her dismay the message said that there had been an accident and the front of the restaurant had been driven through and that it’d take a couple days for the building to be inspected and for it to be repaired so nobody but him had to be there until everything was patched up. As the doors opened into the lobby she hit the button to go back up to her level.

Brogan woke when he heard the door close and lock, signally Sabrina had left for work. He’d dozed for what felt like a few minutes, or maybe it could’ve been hours but something shattered and startled him awake. Snarling he slipped out of bed to go confront the intruder.

Sabrina winced at the crash of the ceramic bowl she accidentally knocked off the counter. She hoped it hadn’t woken Brogan but as she heard her bedroom door squeak open she knew he was coming out. What she wasn’t ready for was the sudden roar as he posed ready to strike. “What the frick Brogan?!” She snapped her fur fluffing as she fell on her butt.

“Bina?” Brogan gasped as he barely stopped himself from lunging at her. His lip uncurled from the snarl he’d been displaying for intimidation. “I-I heard a crash and thought someone was breaking in.”

“I dropped a bowl,” Sabrina said pointing to the ground where shards littered the floor.

Brogan eased back so he wouldn’t shred himself. “But I thought you’d left for work...”

“I did, but I got a call from work saying that the front of the restaurant was smashed so we aren’t going to be open...” Getting the dustpan and small broom out from under the sink she swept up the mess and dumped it into the waste bin. “So I came back... You were snoring so instead of disturbing you I decided to have some cereal and the rest you can figure out.”

Brogan closed the distance to hug Sabrina around the shoulders. “I’m glad you’re okay,” he said.

“Ya, I’m fine,” she said stepping out of the embrace. She looked to the box of artificially fruity cereal and decided she wasn’t hungry anymore. “just could’ve used the money.” She finished as she headed over to the couch, one leg stretching out while the other one was tucked under her a bit. With Brogan being up now Sabrina didn’t have to be quiet so she turned on the tv.

Brogan followed after the Bengal cat and joined her on the couch, the majority of him was off the love seat and on the floor. But he was happy when he slid his head onto her lap and she began drawing soothing circles on the top of his head as she focused on the murder and mayhem show she’d chosen to captivate her interest.
He was fine for a moment before he felt a sneeze coming. He lifted his tongue to the roof of his mouth to stop the urge. It worked and the need abated.
But not nearly long enough.
“Heh...” he gasped, nostrils flaring. “HUh...” Brogan forced his mouth shut to cut off the need to sneeze. Eyes squeezing just as tight. “hHmhH—HhihH!!—uhhh...” He hitched and sighed when it backed off.

Brogan looked down to Sabrina’s tail as it thumped him repeatedly. Had the thwacks to his belly been softer they might have tickled him but they were frustrated smacks.
She was irritated with him, he just knew it. He chuckled to himself, he could just imagine how much more upset she’d be if he HAD sneezed.

Her claws of one paw gripped the arm of the couch. As she tried desperately to focus on the interview with the murderer.
I’d just had enough of him.
Ha!
She could relate to that right now, she laughed in her head.
But there was a small, tiny part of her that wasn’t annoyed at all. And if she was being honest. Brogan’s desperately shuddering breaths were starting to fire up a completely different reaction.

“Heh-IhHh...” he stalled the need again by scrunching his snout. He relaxed with a sigh at the continuing victory streak.

“Just sneeze already!!” Sabrina cried. She had had enough, the mixed feelings confusing her.

Brogan squeaked and jumped a bit, spooked by Sabrina’s shout.

Sabrina grunted as Brogan jerked up and then landed back down on her.

“Wh-h-at?”

“Just sneeze already Brogan!”

“But I-I wasn’t because it would bother yo-“

“Yes it will,” Sabrina huffed. “But right now your spastic breaths are bothering me! So just do your nose and me a favor and sneeze!”

Brogans cheeks reddened with an embarrassed blush. “O-Okay...” He settled his head back awkwardly in her lap again as he waited for the need to sneeze to come back.

Breathing through her nose, Sabrina’s tail slowed from whacking to sliding along Brogan’s underside.

Brogan shook as his tummy was tickled.

Sabrina’s ears perked as Brogan shook beneath her. Her tail stalling. A low growl emitted from her when she realized he was laughing not hitching with the need to sneeze. Her tail went back to whipping.

“I-I’m s-sorry! You were tickling me!” Brogan snorted.

Sabrina rolled her eyes.

The snort tickled his nose and traveled into the depths of his sinuses. “Eh-HhH!! H—hH—“ his eyes slowly began to close as he moved away from her.

“Finally!” Sabrina breathed as she watched.

She was staring at him. “HHeEhH—hHuUhH!! HIiHhhH—...”
“EhH...uHhhhh...”
and the sneeze was right there!

“HeHh—ehhhhh...” he sighed blinking back the tears that had formed in his eyes to see Sabrina still staring at me. “I-I can’t do it with you just staring at me,” Brogan whined.

“What?” Sabrina said incredulously.

“I-I c—hEhH!! HH— can’t sneeze with you looking at me.”

With a growled scoff Sabrina closed her eyes. “There. Happy.” 

“th-thank you,” Brogan said dolefully. His nostrils twitched and flared and he turned away from her. “HehHh!—HHH!!! EhH!!—“ he wanted desperately to sneeze.
Face grimacing atrociously with want as he focused on getting it out.
But nothing happened.
He sighed with two heavily congested sniffs.

“My eyes are closed Brogan,” Sabrina said flatly.

“It’s stuck...”

“What?”

“The sneeze.”

Sabrina’s brows furrowed over her closed eyes in frustration.

At her silence he went on. “I think cause I forced it back for so long and it didn’t want to come on demand... that I need to force it out...”

She opened her eyes to stare at him and the fact he was talking about the sneeze like it was actually making it’s own decisions. “So force it out.”
Aaaaand she couldn’t believe she’d just said that.

“I would if I could,” Brogan said with a wiggle.

He had no limbs. Sabrina felt like an instant idiot. Rather then dwell on it she moved quickly and was straddling Brogan.

He hadn’t even had time to gasp at what had happened until he was beneath her. “Wh-HHh-at are you d-doing?”

She didn’t answer. Just looked down at him as she thought. Tail swishing behind her. Brogan shook as he giggled.
Bringing her tail around to swipe quickly along the front of his snout.
Brogan stopped laughing almost instantaneously. Eyes looking cross at her as he tried to figure out what she’d done. So she showed him, making another pass over his nose with her tail a bit slower this time.

Brogan’s lips parted as he breathed in a small gasp. More in shock then an actual hitch.
 
But the end of Sabrina’s tail was soon back. Flicking her appendage quickly over his right nostril before switching over to his left.
“Heh—hH-H!! —-HuUhH!!”

Sabrina gulped as Brogan shuddered beneath her. She watched unabashedly as his nares flared showing the cold riddled, wet inner walls as they undulated.
She moved the tip of her tail just a bit inside his nostril when he inhaled and sucked it in further.

“HAhH—HEEIGHHHSSHEEEEIIOOOO!!! HuHH!-“

Her tail blew out of his snout along with a cloud of wetness.
When did the room become sweltering?

“UHH’HAEHHISHHEEUHHHH!!! HehH!! hehH—iHH—“

There wouldn’t be another stuck sneeze on her watch. Sabrina caressed the space between Brogan’s nostrils once again with her tail.

“EHIh—HEEEISHHHIEUUuuEe!!”
Brogan moaned with the bliss at his nose finally being satiated.  But the ecstasy didn’t last long. He’d just sneezed several times on Sabrina.
“I-I’m so sorry Sab,” he began, opening his eyes to see that her eyes were fixed on him, dilated. Dilated just like when they got intimate.
“B-Bina?” He tried again.

Sabrina shook her head as she forced herself to regain some semblance of composure. “Brogan, I just showered,” she whined, moving to get off him before he noticed the true reaction he’d caused within her.

Brogan sniffled. Feeling absolutely awful for sneezing on her.
Disgusting her.
“i-i’m so sorry.” He’d come over wanting some TLC, but he hadn’t meant to be such a burden.






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« Reply #4 on: March 03, 2020, 08:43:27 PM »
Hey thanks Lurker!!! That really means a lot!! I wanna continue with the Jurassic crew someday!! And thanks for the scenario!! Totally went with your suggested tail coaxing— sorry I’m not sure how to properly tag you—- hope you see this ❤️

Don't worry, I saw.
Thank you for taking my suggestion! I didn't really mind the length, it provided more background and stuff and as you promised, was worth it. Good job. :)
(Also, sidenote: Excited to see that the Jurassic crew might be returning. Can't wait!)

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Re: Modern Monsters **M//CYOA-pos?**(1-?)
« Reply #5 on: March 08, 2020, 07:04:34 AM »
Thanks for sharing this work.  I've enjoyed it!

And it's not even close to being too long!  Don't sweat it ;)

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Re: Modern Monsters **M//CYOA-pos?**(1-?)
« Reply #6 on: March 09, 2020, 01:41:20 AM »
What is 'CYOA-pos?' I am unfamiliar with that tag.
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Re: Modern Monsters **M//CYOA-pos?**(1-?)
« Reply #7 on: March 09, 2020, 02:48:57 AM »
Thanks for sharing this work.  I've enjoyed it!

And it's not even close to being too long!  Don't sweat it ;)

Hey Thanks yasl!! Just ya know when ur writing and sometimes it feels like daaaaang that’s a lot— everyone else is going to think the same!!🤣

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Re: Modern Monsters **M//CYOA-pos?**(1-?)
« Reply #8 on: March 09, 2020, 03:01:27 AM »
What is 'CYOA-pos?' I am unfamiliar with that tag.


Let me just start by saying I’m a huge fan of your work!!! 🤩🤩🤩 CYOA— Choose Your Own Adventure—  the books where you read a paragraph or a few pages and at the bottom there’s two options door number one and door number two— same idea but like I’m not putting the limitations— soooo if you read it and want to see it head in a certain direction or have something you wanna see happen— mention it—- and I’ll write it in— (I’ve realized my writer’s block is like Jimmy Neutron’s Professor Calamitous— I’ll start something and then stop— but if someone suggests something it gets back into it— soooooo pretty please I encourage suggestions!!💖💖💖

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Re: Modern Monsters **M//CYOA-pos?**(1-?)
« Reply #9 on: May 16, 2020, 07:59:03 PM »
Sooooooo. Decided to return with a few more suggestions. Here they are :)
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Maybe they're eating lunch or something, and an accident happens with pepper or something and maybe they could both end up sneezing a bit.
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Anything involving tickling noses with a feather is great in my book too, so that could be fun to include somewhere, possibly with Sabrina maybe tickling his nose with said feather while he is sleeping or something. Just a few random ideas I've been thinking of.

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« Reply #10 on: May 30, 2020, 06:13:39 AM »
Love this story!
Was hoping i could find the Jurassic Sneeze one everyone was talking about?

Anyone have the link?

Cheers,
Drea

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Re: Modern Monsters **M//CYOA-pos?**(1-?)
« Reply #11 on: May 30, 2020, 10:54:23 AM »
Love this story!
Was hoping i could find the Jurassic Sneeze one everyone was talking about?

Anyone have the link?

Cheers,
Drea

Here you go
https://sneezefurs.org/index.php?topic=3782.0